Friday, 25 October 2019

The best best day Ever!

My class has been doing writing and this week we have worked on poems about something that has happened in the past I love making poems because they are fun to make.My next step is to add detail to my writing,anyways this is my poem!


The best day ever! 
I saw flashing green  trees everywhere as we slowly drove through the camp area.
I heard trees swishing side to side when the leafs fell down.I felt relaxed while it was nice and peaceful.
I wonder if i´m going back?I saw a blue shiny river sparkling to nature. 

I heard birds chirping around me sweetly.
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous28 November 2019 at 10:23

    hi sam here i lick how you did writh

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  2. Anonymous28 November 2019 at 10:36

    Hi Aimee it´s Olive from New Brighton catholic school I liked your blog because it was interesting but I think you could put more interesting stuff in it. my question is what did you write your poem about?

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  3. Anonymous28 November 2019 at 11:29

    Hello Aimee Jayden here from New Brighton Catholic School.I think you did well at your goal by making your writing more it descriptive.you could work on putting punctuation in the right spots.Where did you go for your camping trip?

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