WALT:use use the figures of speech from the week
today in writing we have been learning to write using all the writing skills we have learnt over the week we have learnt simile, alliteration & hyperbole. so we had to mix those together and make a story using them all! I created this on a google doc. adding all those makes a interesting story from scratch so try yourself! what do you like mostly about writing? 📝
here is my story: The Pie Thief.
One cold evening I was shivering like I somehow got electrocuted. But I was just cold, I went to watch some TV after being sick for a few hours. I shook the spare shivers off and stumbled heading down. Ow, that hurt. I was starving I could have eaten all my food in less then half a second! As I walked over I sniffed delighted the delicious pie!, baked for me!! Until. My annoying sister hopped in like a boomerang and ate My pie right in front of me. ¨Jealousy jealousy¨
I sighed to myself, and baked myself a new one. Went out of the room for about 1 minute and it was gone! I went to the spare kitchen to see my sister holding the spare pie! ¨If I cant have it neither can anyone else¨ I said,
as I yanked it out of her hand. whoops? I pushed it in the wrong direction and there it went right on my sisters face.. She had sloppy pastry all over her face stuck like a magnet. I thought to myself this could be time where I get revenge on my pie thief sister!! I laughed, I grabbed water and the filing of the pie off the ground and the tasty filling splashed on her face like someone had just put whipped cream on her face.
Then for the final details I added some fresh water on top of her head. She was furious but she tried to chase after me but ended up just to slip. I ran back to the normal kitchen but mum was standing there like she had just saw something she hated. Maybe it was me? Well she doesn't hate me right?? Next thing I knew she went off like a blizzard! This after that. She finally let me speak and my words were ¨then just don't become a pie thief¨ I said, with a grin..
Nice writing Aimee
ReplyDeleteKia ora Aimee, what an amazing piece of writing. As your audience I enjoyed the imagery and I can relate to having annoying siblings. I'm sure Makayla isn't such a viscous pie thief, but you did get your revenge! It would be cool to add an image to your story, maybe drawn or using an online tool. I love a pie, particularly home made mince ones, what is your favourite?
ReplyDeleteHi Aimee
ReplyDeleteWhat a creative piece of writing, you have a great imagination. Next time just make sure you check that all your sentences start with a capital letter. I liked how I could use my imagination to visualise what your sister would look like with pie all over her face. Have you ever made a real pie?
Sarah