Time flashes by like it was only yesterday. I´m hear to talk about the story of the dragons sorrow…
WALT: Use A Simile. We Have Been learning about simile´s and how they can effect to help us with description towards writing. since I knew what simile´s were. my writing has gotten better and starts to be entertaining. we had 15 minutes to write a story. what have you learnt about writing? do you use simile´s in writing? Here is my writing: The Dragon´s Sorrow.
it was my brothers 5th birthday. He was spoilt with lots of gifts but one thing showed up unexpectedly, the kid wanted air
so he climbed terrifically until he reached the top of the staircase. He saw something that made his jaw drop like a window opening. He saw a dragon! As he had no idea what to do he let out a scream.. But to his surprise nobody came, it was like they were ignoring him. He felt guilty for absolutely nothing. He tried to communicate with the dragon, but it had its on ways to talk. Sooner or later I came up knowing he would be here but I could only see fog like a tornado had hit, but nothing was damaged. I was confused as I saw a dragon with sloppy scales I walked behind as I got terrified when they both turned around,
I thought my brother was being controlled by this dragon, but then my brother greeted my just with the annoying ¨greetings rat¨ I hate when you call me that I said with a angry face, I noticed he was sitting on the slimy back I told him to get off immediately but that didn't work one bit, he was now the one encouraging me!! I soon got on scared for life as we twisted and turn, and soon we made it to an abandoned stable, if expired stables expected this would be it. The hay was disgusting not just the hay everything!
But then I saw something a note crumbled that looked like it was written million´s of years ago, if time excited then..
Kia ora Aimee. It's good to see you enjoying your writing and recognising how you can hook an audience. Be careful when posting. The layout of your writing is off the page and difficult to read. I like a good simile used in moderation, I have really started noticing them in the books I read now. WHat would you do if you found a dragon's egg?
ReplyDeleteHello Mr Gray, Thank You For Commenting. Fixed The Page! If I saw a egg I would try take care of it until it hatched but at first I would be horrified.
DeleteIt would probably be worth lots of money. Feeding the dragon would be tricky. If it was friendly I would keep it. It could fly me places so i could beat the traffic. What do you think are some pros and cons of owning a dragon?
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